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nanda's picture
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7 days

7 days obesity reduction program

7 days

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mara06's picture
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In the US, this would violate "truth in advertising" laws. The implication is that a grossly obese person can expect to go through the program and emerge a slim tennis star in only seven days.

Perhaps if you had the slim man trapped inside the obese man, longing to be let out, you know what I mean? That's even more of an Ayurvedic concept. Your tag line could be

Find the slimmer, healthier person inside you.
Ayurveda can help you begin, with its safe, natural
Seven-Day Obesity Reduction Program.

You keep changing the name of the program, so I don't know what to call it, but I assume you get the idea.

Mara

garyW's picture
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Mara, why bother leaving a comment if nanda is likely to delete his post like he's done on the three earlier ones?

nanda's picture
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yeah again i thought change wht to do...

nanda's picture
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this headline may be suits for ayurveda lets do the change soo can i use your headline?

Ayurveda can help you begin, with its safe, natural
saven-day obesity reduction program.

but i like the line only thing is its little length right!!!

how to make short?

mara06's picture
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You may NOT use my work. Do your own, based on the suggestions you receive here and elsewhere.

If you don't know how to shorten a lengthy line in English and still have it make sense, then I'd say perhaps you should not be designing ads/posters/whatever in English yourself. Get a translator who knows the language to write the copy for you (just as I would do if I had to create something in a language I don't know very well), or do your work in your own language.

Mara

Waleed's picture
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It could be liposuction... :-)

Just kidding..

ireid's picture
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"We help you shrink that belly- Naturally."

or something like that. Maybe show something that gets smaller over time?

What this needs is a solid idea and there isn't really one yet.

"Try not, Do! or do not, there is no try."
-Yoda

shmoehead's picture
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I think I am a "second guy from the left" person, at least in stature, and my first thought would be "yeah right"........Judging from the comments others have made, I would have to agree that it seems a bit "unbelievable" from the start....This might cause would be "customers" to simply click their way to another place on the Web.....I like the graphics, but a little more about the exact time it could take may be more "honest"......Something along the line of progression would be nice to know.....A more realistic "goal setting" might even be useful as well....

Good luck !!!

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