Sorry to be harsh, but this is very "beginner" looking. It looks like a Microsoft word document or something. I think you should read a few design books and try again. There's no visual impact here and even the artwork in the background looks choppy and thrown together.
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I don't want to come off as harsh, but this looks like a high school design project assignment. The drop shadow and the centering of the text are very "beginner". Also there is no hierarchy going on...everything is competing with everything else. Imagine if you got this at your doorstep or where ever, what would you do...quite honestly it lacks the professionalism and impact of what people expect designers to be able to create. What if you created some kind of catchy ad for yourself instead? I also think it's extremely redundant to have your logo as well as your name. Nobody is going to choose you because of your name/company name because they don't even know who you are and what your capable of...and especially with this flyer, you're portraying yourself as not knowing much design. Once again, don't mean to come off as harsh, but you've got to make an impact if you want people to call you to design their "stuff"
did you spell check this?
cause i'm pretty damn sure it's spelled "creativity" and not "creativty"
Smack dab in the middle at the top, the very first word, the biggest one there, and it's got a FAT ASS JUMP IN YOUR FACE typo.
the rest has either been said, or will be said...
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Architectural Technician - Multimedia Designer www.ArchMedia.us
Not just for the major errors, like your typo in the word "Creativity" but for other small formatting details. For example, if you're using caps on "Business Cards" and "Product Packaging," then you need to make it "Book Covers" (with a capital "C").
A lot of clients may or may not notice things like this, but they make all the difference in truly professional work.
I'm not a big fan of your design for this, but I don't know if you're just a beginner or not. Keep trying, and post an update if you want.
Hi there, Its me again, the beginner designer. I was looking at the critique section and I looked at this and I needed to comment. Lol im learning. not there yet but learning. The backround of the type is not helping you at all. what does the cloud represent. Its faded and it makes your type look raw, It actually hurts looking at it a long time.play with it a little bit more and keep on sketching. Good luck
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Good lord, i'm not sure
Good lord, i'm not sure where to start here.
Sorry to be harsh, but this is very "beginner" looking. It looks like a Microsoft word document or something. I think you should read a few design books and try again. There's no visual impact here and even the artwork in the background looks choppy and thrown together.
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life is great; without it, you'd be dead.
Yikes
I don't want to come off as harsh, but this looks like a high school design project assignment. The drop shadow and the centering of the text are very "beginner". Also there is no hierarchy going on...everything is competing with everything else. Imagine if you got this at your doorstep or where ever, what would you do...quite honestly it lacks the professionalism and impact of what people expect designers to be able to create. What if you created some kind of catchy ad for yourself instead? I also think it's extremely redundant to have your logo as well as your name. Nobody is going to choose you because of your name/company name because they don't even know who you are and what your capable of...and especially with this flyer, you're portraying yourself as not knowing much design. Once again, don't mean to come off as harsh, but you've got to make an impact if you want people to call you to design their "stuff"
Program?
Before I critique this I have a question. What program did you make this in?
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Powerpoint. I couldn't
Powerpoint.
I couldn't resist. :)
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Powerpoint is not a design application
I just had some guy send me
I just had some guy send me a postcard he made in powerpoint - then imported into gimp. good lord it was a fuzzy mess
life is great; without it, you'd be dead.
He must be a wanna-be
He must be a wanna-be designer. :)
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Powerpoint is not a design application
god damn
did you spell check this?
cause i'm pretty damn sure it's spelled "creativity" and not "creativty"
Smack dab in the middle at the top, the very first word, the biggest one there, and it's got a FAT ASS JUMP IN YOUR FACE typo.
the rest has either been said, or will be said...
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Architectural Technician - Multimedia Designer
www.ArchMedia.us
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Never to be seen, or heard
Never to be seen, or heard from, again...
life is great; without it, you'd be dead.
You Need a Proofreader
Not just for the major errors, like your typo in the word "Creativity" but for other small formatting details. For example, if you're using caps on "Business Cards" and "Product Packaging," then you need to make it "Book Covers" (with a capital "C").
A lot of clients may or may not notice things like this, but they make all the difference in truly professional work.
I'm not a big fan of your design for this, but I don't know if you're just a beginner or not. Keep trying, and post an update if you want.
light bulb just went on
Hi there, Its me again, the beginner designer. I was looking at the critique section and I looked at this and I needed to comment. Lol im learning. not there yet but learning. The backround of the type is not helping you at all. what does the cloud represent. Its faded and it makes your type look raw, It actually hurts looking at it a long time.play with it a little bit more and keep on sketching. Good luck
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