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Aeiucena

Brig (54 pencils) | Sun, 2005-09-04 06:06

insert for an Aeiucena promo kit!
Hes a new DJ.

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Jammo | Sun, 2005-09-04 11:01

if the insert is to advertise the new DJ, perhaps the photo should be of the new DJ, or if the guy in photo is the DJ its not that clear.

Also, my eye is all over the place with that star pattern, you should perhaps tone it down a bit. To me there isnt a real focus on this insert it just looks to me like some effects and a girl screaming (sorry to be harsh)

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Waleed | Sun, 2005-09-04 21:03

I don't know the entire business line of Aeiucena, but I agree with Jammo that the photo does not match the promo.. I might go for something towards music, dancing, and social groups..

Photo idea#1: DJ with his/her mixing equipment and a dance floor with assorted people dancing with official uniforms or outfits (nuns, construction workers, doctors, firemen, suits, ...)

Photo idea#2: Funeral stopping at the door of Aeiucena night club with the undertaker running to go inside Aeiucena and a guy steps out of the coffin to go in too.. Neon sign on the wall says "New DJ" with an arrow pointing to the door.

Photo idea#3: Young man at a lecture, eager to leave the room and head to Aeiucena.

I'm sure more ideas will spur out after a while, hehe..

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Fuelrock | Sun, 2005-09-04 23:16

Photo idea #2 is a great one...I'd love to see that realized and it would work really well for a promotional piece like this

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sonixevo | Sun, 2005-09-04 14:03

Hmm maybe you should change the photo, as Jammo said, since the emphasis is on the DJ and not the girls. Still, I like the star effect, though it should be toned down. Maybe you would like to apply the star thing for the photo alone, and remove the circles in the white parts..

The colors are not bad, I think the red and orange for the words go pretty well.

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Fuelrock | Sun, 2005-09-04 16:24

The circles work just fine on the white part of the image but it's just too much over top of the picture. I can't focus on it

Overall, I like it. Particularly the red star

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Jammo | Sun, 2005-09-04 18:23

I forgot to mention that I also like the color scheme, as sonixevo said red and orange do go well together.

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Brig | Mon, 2005-09-05 06:24

Right on!! thanks guys! Im gonna change some of it! Really GOOD feedback, i didnt even think about toning it down. ill take another stab at it.....

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mijlee | Mon, 2005-09-05 08:55

A nice slightly subtler approach might be to have a grid of white circles with the dark key-line running over the whole background but with a 30-50 transparency so they don't jump out too much. This should then show up on the white and dark areas.

Try this and change the image and you might be good.

Lave the DJs name, how the hell do you pronounce it? Ayusaina
I might rename myself as ĢǾїΫþð

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Ivan | Wed, 2005-09-07 08:28

I looked at this poster at least 5 times, before I could formulate my opinion.

What I like is the circles. They make you look and look and look. I like the red star.

What I don't like is the photo. It's too generic and not focused. Drunk ppl are not particularly inviting (at least not for me). Maybe if you crop in on the faces only it would work better. Too much happening on this poster. Try to stylize the image. Maybe illustration would work better and make the poster cleaner. Maybe you can find a trendier and cleaner font too.

Sorry to be so negative. I think you've got a great start, hope I helped. :/

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