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landrik's picture
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Any thought

Here is a design, i'm currently working on!
It's for a local women's organisation, revemping their site.

I Had a look at it last nite! there seem to
be something missing, but i couldn't put
my finger on it! Perhaps the serif font of that navigation or title! or maybe the usage of that color!

Any thought is appreciated!

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ollstar's picture
109 pencils

looks pretty nice at first view.
maybe you should change the colors of these three boxes with jobs etc. (for example, use 3 different blues, a little darker than the background color)
another point, i would scale down the sponsor (?) logos at the bottom a little bit, i think they get to much attention

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melange's picture
134 pencils

One of the things i like to do, is printscreen my document in greyscale. Sometimes this will show you how good your contrasts are. I think if you printed this out gray, those three boxes would all be of the same tone and might not even show up in gray. Maybe you need something with a little pop. I think the green one bothers me the most for some reason. I just think the whole thing is lacking darks and lights to me. Maybe just push it a little more.

Layout wise, i really like it though

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jesthered's picture
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RE: the grayscale printing.

stephanie's picture
518 pencils

The first thing that needs to be altered is the colour scheme. It looks very strange how it is - you've got a back-tone of a subdued blue, and then bright colours on top (the three boxes.) Choose one or the other. If you're like the background colour/the blue gradient, choose colours to match around that. I don't think they all have to be blue - but they all have to have a similar saturation.

Second, it bothers me how everything is horizontal. You've got horizontal navigation, horizontal design, horizontal boxes, horizontal type, horizontal logo selection. . . .you get my point. Try mixing it up a little. Use vertical navigation for example, or make your type more of a box shape.

Why is the opacity on the border of the "card logo" so low? You can see right through it to the background.

Also, it might just be me, but it seems like the card that contains the logo should be on the left side of the design, instead of the right. It might just be that I'm right handed, I don't know, but it seems awkward where my eyes go - reading the text before seeing the logo.

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Artfiend's picture
70 pencils

Well, pretty much everything that had to be said was said, but I don't get the card logo altogether...what if they ask for business cards down the road...will that be on them? What *does* the "business card logo" represent?

Artfiend's picture
70 pencils

read headline.

mara06's picture
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An organization to empower Greek Cypriot women simply begs to incorporate into its identity the famous "golden ratio" (represented in Greek by the letter for phi that I don't know how to insert here, or I would). It appears so often in Nature as to be considered by many to suggest divinity (see Da Vinci's Vetruvian Man, Fibonacci numbers, et al.); the roots of gynocentric culture in Cypress run deep, and this also relates. Trust me, it does. It has to do with non-linear thought and art, often considered to be more "feminine" than "masculine."

I find your horizontal layout of all the elements very unwomanly, and, on a more practical note, monotonous and hard to read. You use a curving wave motif near the top, but it appears arbitrary. I would work more with that idea. Waves = change, right? That's an idea that also suits the organization.

Also, I note that they name their organization after the Goddess of Weaving and the Loom -- which, in the context of her story, is a metaphor for creating beautiful and useful goods in spite of past hardship. It would be cool to reflect this in your design somehow, rather than almost hiding the organization's name, as you've done.

Given that Cypress is an island, I think the blues and greens are a reasonable choice, though perhaps a little too placid, and, as others have said, you need more contrast. What about bringing in some other colors unique to the natural environment and traditional arts of Cypress? And do consider rearranging the page's elements in a more pleasing way, with the golden ratio in mind.

Sorry to babble on. Your project intrigues me, and I hope you'll make the most of it.

Mara

Rick's picture
75 pencils

I think you could kill two birds with one stone by reversing the placement of the logo and menu bar.

Thoughts?

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landrik's picture
11 pencils

Thanks rick! just did that and also changed teh color for the 3 boxes(shades of blues, i think!) also scaled down the sponsors banner down(footer)....and i have tgo admit it looks gr8! just dont know how to post the screen shot!

siryan's picture
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a lot has been said already, may be im old school in thought but i think text always read better on white and since this a web pge, resolutions and the quality or screen will differ so may be think about that. also that blue is hitting at first site, which makes it a little too pop, like a artist(musician) website. people relate more to people so may be in place of the card try a pic showing what the org is all about.

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landrik's picture
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Got your point Siryan! My client did not provide whatsover! i had to come up with that myself! cant even provide a logo! or images(well he did sent some picture on a word document)...i have a sneaky feeling that the design might change once they decide to provide something!

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