Corporate Ad for Karate School
Hadez (21 pencils) | Sat, 2007-02-24 00:08Hello everyone. My buddy sent me a link to this site today and I decided to upload what I was working on today just to get some feedback. Client has karate school, and would like to mail this 8.5x11 to companies. Would love to get your thoughts.
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Also needs better typography.
The type isn't all that clear being over such a busy pattern and needs to be punched out a little more to work.
The "Our Packages" font looks odd stuck there on its own.
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Just thought I'd point that out... the first thing I saw... the guy's had his head chopped off. :D Also his legs.
The colors and patterns are interesting and good but overall I agree it's too busy.
Oh boy, it's way too much stuff in that design.
Analyze what things you *really* need to get the message through, and what things you can get rid of (there's a lot of that ones ;) )
Also I would show either all the body of the man, or a silhouette, but not half the body :S
Hope it helped!
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Here's the one thing that you've absolutely got to fix: I wouldn't have had any idea that this is for a karate school except for the fact that you wrote it in your introduction text below the image. I could read all the text on the page three times and still not really have any idea what it's for. SOME kind of class.
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