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Fashion Week ATL

I am branding the Fashion Week Atlanta for school. One of my deliverables is a series of three posters. I will post the others as I produce them (website, cd with soundtrack, VIP mailer and the event's access card).
With these, the idea was to convey color, movement and sound elegantly.
Please let me know what you think.
This is my biggest challenge in school this quarter.

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onegirlcreative's picture
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First off, there is way too much black space going on. It isn't working. I love black as a background, but in this particular composition, it isn't balanced correctly.

Your type treatment at the bottom is boring and I'm not a big fan of center justified, especially with a poster design. You need to experiment with different font styles and take it much further.

Secondly, you need to have much more detail such as dates, time, place, etc. of where/when the Fashion Week will be held. Simply having "scheduled to debut in April 2009" is not sufficient.

I would put more emphasis on the form and redesign the rainbow swirls to indicate a skirt or something like that. Right now, it just isn't working.

I truly think you should start over and rework your design/composition. There is truly nothing exciting or unique about this poster design.

Sorry!

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natobasso's picture
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+1 on event specifics. This piece has to be function as well as fashion. :)

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plugz's picture
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First off, there is way too much black space going on. It isn't working. I love black as a background, but in this particular composition, it isn't balanced correctly.

Particularly this^^

Leaky Penny's picture
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It ain't doing it for me. You have some good variants on your
website. I have to say, some of your work is really nice.

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olliesan1's picture
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Maybe play with the composition some. But I like your idea of using the form, clothing would just be too predictable. Though I would perhaps round off the shoulders a bit to soften it. You could also experiment with giving it some depth. I also like that your flourishes interact with the type.

natobasso's picture
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Didn't you know white is the new black?! He he.

Seriously, I love this. Two things though: Pick a more forward/modern font for the title and subtitle text -- they just aren't screaming high fashion to me; don't center everything.

#1 is the best. Make a new version and get more creative with the elements. The design is there, just the placement needs work.

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dsauna's picture
286 pencils

I'm gonna have to agree with nato, this is a very good design, i really like the white space. You need dates and information, maybe they can add to the design.

The bottom text needs some work though

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3dogmama's picture
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I like it and also agree about the text at the bottom. It's not working. I'd either flush it to fall in line with the word "WEEK" and bold it; or shape it into the legs base of the mannequin.

Your work is high creative and excellent.
Cheers.
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