What are the rest of us, chopped liver? I think you should do without the image still. Change it, something. Why is that little logo at the bottom on the edge? It's going to get chopped off.
as i said, it isn't at the edge, just the way it is saved in jpeg. in the illustrator it is further away.
you know, i'm getting so much negatives about this new look. i guess i'd better stick to the old plain one. i personally like that better too. thanks guys.
The text looks great but unfortunately I find your illustration on top unnecessary (not that I don't like it). I would suggest incorporating your illustration along with the text but be sure to keep it simple ... see how you could play around with the letter "i"s on the words "proving" and "possibilities" ...
Just a side note, that logo at the bottom reminds me so much of the Montreal Canadians (Habs) logo ...
The first thing I thought after looking at the thumbnail and reading the headline "disproving impossibilities", is that there is no punch line. Unless the image on the top left is proving or disproving something (and I'm the first to say I'm not a science or engineering major so maybe it is?), then I don't really get a pay off from the visual on the top left.
Maybe you can do some research with the help of your client and see if there is something that both proves and disproves something and use that as a clever visual. You may not reach all potential targets (aka laymen), but those that do get it probably are your target market anyway.
Granted, this doesn't have to be a "see and say" ad, but I was hoping for a clever image to go with the clever wordplay. Since the text works on it's own, I'd argue that this work can do without the molecular graphic.
Now if you';ll just take
Now if you'll just take mine about space on the bottom right, under the logo...
Mara
This^^
And for some reason that image isn't working there in the top left.
It's gone too small now I think.
What about larger and at a tint?
haha...actually on the
haha...actually on the illustrator it is not at the edge. just that when i save it as a jpeg it doesn't show that extra space :)
What are the rest of us,
What are the rest of us, chopped liver? I think you should do without the image still. Change it, something. Why is that little logo at the bottom on the edge? It's going to get chopped off.
as i said, it isn't at the
as i said, it isn't at the edge, just the way it is saved in jpeg. in the illustrator it is further away.
you know, i'm getting so much negatives about this new look. i guess i'd better stick to the old plain one. i personally like that better too. thanks guys.
stand and de'liver'...
Pokie,
From what I see 'seraphim', 'Mara06' and myself were the only ones to give specific feedback on his last design concept.
If you want homage try providing more than... "Good. I totally agree with the other posters. It will also make it more mysterious."
I will give you one thing... you're the master of the 1-line critique. ;P
Erm, my chopped liver thing
Erm, my chopped liver thing was a joke.
The rudeness was a nice touch though, thank you.
damn dupe
dupe
I like the top corner
I like the top corner illustration. Type is too aligned too balanced. Make it more dynamic somehow.
The text looks great but
The text looks great but unfortunately I find your illustration on top unnecessary (not that I don't like it). I would suggest incorporating your illustration along with the text but be sure to keep it simple ... see how you could play around with the letter "i"s on the words "proving" and "possibilities" ...
Just a side note, that logo at the bottom reminds me so much of the Montreal Canadians (Habs) logo ...
logo
i know, many members critiqued about that. but that is not my work; it is their logo *shrugs*
for more information/critiques, i have included the link to the original post: http://creativebits.org/brochure_cover_for_college_of_science_and_engineering
No punch line?
The first thing I thought after looking at the thumbnail and reading the headline "disproving impossibilities", is that there is no punch line. Unless the image on the top left is proving or disproving something (and I'm the first to say I'm not a science or engineering major so maybe it is?), then I don't really get a pay off from the visual on the top left.
Maybe you can do some research with the help of your client and see if there is something that both proves and disproves something and use that as a clever visual. You may not reach all potential targets (aka laymen), but those that do get it probably are your target market anyway.
Granted, this doesn't have to be a "see and say" ad, but I was hoping for a clever image to go with the clever wordplay. Since the text works on it's own, I'd argue that this work can do without the molecular graphic.
I like your thinking...
Needs more rabbit and top hat.
ah the image. yes, they were
ah the image. yes, they were thinking of using m.c. escher's work for a more 'impossible' image.