"Jason" Mark
JW Wolf (11 pencils) | Sun, 2010-10-17 19:12
I updated my mark based on all of your feedback. I dropped the copy reference to the months of the year, re-shapped and simplified the mark, and added color. Thanks a ton for your comments.
I plan to use this mark on my business cards The first letter of July, August, September, October, and November forms my name, Jason. That is how I started the design for this mark... using 12 hashes representing the months. After many revision cycles, this is what happened. Let me know what you think. Your input is valuable. You can contact me directly at eval(unescape('%64%6f%63%75%6d%65%6e%74%2e%77%72%69%74%65%28%27%3c%61%20%68%72%65%66%3d%22%6d%61%69%6c%74%6f%3a%74%68%65%6a%77%2e%77%69%6c%73%6f%6e%40%79%61%68%6f%6f%2e%63%6f%6d%22%3e%74%68%65%6a%77%2e%77%69%6c%73%6f%6e%40%79%61%68%6f%6f%2e%63%6f%6d%3c%2f%61%3e%27%29%3b'))
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Way to convoluted. K.I.S.S. The idea is irrelevant, and really, I could care less for it. The calendar has nothing to do with what it is *you* do. The fact that your name is represented in the calendar is not a reason to use that as a concept.
Also, what would this look like in black and white?
Leaky Penny
Check out what I've been up to lately!
http://petersonjoseph.com
I'm going to print it out and eat it.
-Unknown Artist
unless your work has some sort of relationship to a calendar. i dont think your name being represented in it is enough reason to use it as your logo.
as a promotional piece - sure! but not as your logo.
aside from that, from a design perspective, there's just too much going on.
at first, i didnt even see the calendar. i saw a piano keyboard or maybe some kinda guitar hero thing...
+1 on the promotional piece. You can create a calendar and have your name show up in some createive way as you tears the sheets off.
Leaky Penny
Check out what I've been up to lately!
http://petersonjoseph.com
I'm going to print it out and eat it.
-Unknown Artist
I think it's interesting but dumb. Many things are like that and we like to smile for seconds like a child isn't it?
You can make something memorable without make the audience say "and WTF you want to say with this"
It's cool but childish.
yes I'm brazilian xD
I see your calendar reference...smart...but you may have to portray this in an alternate format?
My first off I thought it kind of "Supermanish". My 2nd return. Tiny. Reserved. Distant came to mind. My 3rd return. Waaaayyyy too manydistractions and zero solidarity and connection.
My advice would be to start doodling your thoughts. Keep the pad and pencil with you at ALL times...well, MOST times ok? And then repost here. I'd like to see your progress with a self-identity piece because I struggle with my own stuff more so than my clients'.
Cheers.
3dog
"Art -- the one achievement of Man which has made the long trip up from all fours seem well advised." - James Thurber
It's very 'graphic design'. If it were a poster, I'd say you've got something there.
Without my sense of direction, I don't know where I'd be.
Thanks to everybody for the feedback. The more I look at it the cheesier it gets. I am going to drop the text and simplify it. Its needs to be shaped to fit into a square..currently it is way too wide.
Again, I appreciate the feedback. Cheers.
ok. youre kinda new here. so here is a suggestion. this is a forum. for EVERYONE to glean insight.
dont replace your original graphic. if you do. all the existing comments are rendered useless.
please:
1. post a new graphic into a reply
2. post a whole new thread
aside from that. this new design just looks like a battery progress bar. GREAT if youre a battery company. whole-heartedly WRONG, if youre a designer...
To add to wgzn's comment about correct posting, what the heck are we looking at? What's your concept?
Leaky Penny
Check out what I've been up to lately!
http://petersonjoseph.com
I'm going to print it out and eat it.
-Unknown Artist
Dude. Give us an idea of what you're trying to communicate.
Without my sense of direction, I don't know where I'd be.
Nope.
living on dreams and custard creams.
those "distressed" typewriter fonts are for display/poster use ONLY. and only when there is no better or more appropriate option.
Reminds me of how a logo for a school or institute would look.
If sticking with your given names for your company, have you tried playing with your last name yet?
"Art -- the one achievement of Man which has made the long trip up from all fours seem well advised." - James Thurber
Folks are right on about your type, regardless of trying to communicate with dichotomy of hard lines and expressive typog. - that one's a miss. If I were certain that's what I wanted to do, I'd use a bolder typewriter font and move some "sketchiness" around it but further away from the type but close enough to stay part of the typog.
I think proportions are wrong...especially with all the kind of trite contrast.
I'd draw it from scratch without rulers or guides four or five separate times and see what that did for me.
Definitely switch your pallet up, it'll be appealing to that post college, post nascar crowd but only for a few more months. It's just been played out and is usually abandoned early by all the big money firms I've seen for a reason.
I don't know who we're trying to sell to here, but an easy way to make this SO much more interesting would be a tone on tone of the orange and different grays top and bottom. I don't know...