Submitted by alexleonard on Wed, 2006-11-08 13:38.
I think this is an improvement on the last one
The turtle looks much more like a helmet although the floating is a little odd, I certainly haven't come up with anything that could look better.
I think maybe either lose the shadow entirely or really place it somewhere recognisable.. i don't know, like a nearly transparent background image of a road or something??
Actually, I like the simplistic approach to this. First of all, I think the picture of the turtle should speak for itself. Obviously, a turtle needs its shell, therefore, the shell protects the turtle. In essence, by wearing a helmet, the child/kid will be/should be protected.
Honestly, I don't think you need to put anything else out there. I like that the shell of the turtle is reminiscent of a real helmet, and I don't see that it looks like it's floating. It would look ridiculous if the turtle was attempting to skateboard or whatever. I think the plain white space with the text is really all that is needed. And because of the slight drop shadow, it doesn't seem to appear as though it's floating, I think once you remove that, it will.
Put the text on the bottom so we get the image first, then the message. It will have twice the impact. For me, reading the text first just muddled the message.
what are you doing to your poor turtles?
he floats again. maybe he should be on a skateboard?
HI
wHY skateboard i don't understand it's in in floor right?
But by the way in India we
But by the way in India we don't use skateboard, i hope people will understand this concept. I showen this creative so many people they appreciated.
And any way give me yr personel id pls so i can e-mail
skateturtle
no on the email.
i thought this was a kids wear your helmet campaign? If they understand what a floating turtle means then OK.
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I think this is an improvement on the last one
The turtle looks much more like a helmet although the floating is a little odd, I certainly haven't come up with anything that could look better.
I think maybe either lose the shadow entirely or really place it somewhere recognisable.. i don't know, like a nearly transparent background image of a road or something??
Maybe slightly strengthen the text as well?
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Try a darker, shorter shadow
Try a darker, shorter shadow to make him closer to the ground. Or, maybe just cut off the bottom part entirely and zoom in on his cute little face.
Simple
Actually, I like the simplistic approach to this. First of all, I think the picture of the turtle should speak for itself. Obviously, a turtle needs its shell, therefore, the shell protects the turtle. In essence, by wearing a helmet, the child/kid will be/should be protected.
Honestly, I don't think you need to put anything else out there. I like that the shell of the turtle is reminiscent of a real helmet, and I don't see that it looks like it's floating. It would look ridiculous if the turtle was attempting to skateboard or whatever. I think the plain white space with the text is really all that is needed. And because of the slight drop shadow, it doesn't seem to appear as though it's floating, I think once you remove that, it will.
It's very succinct and that's all it needs.
That's MY opinion.
One more thing...
Oh, I forgot—you don't really need the quotation marks unless you're actually quoting someone. Just take them out. It's simple and to the point.
Put the text on the bottom
Put the text on the bottom so we get the image first, then the message. It will have twice the impact. For me, reading the text first just muddled the message.
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