Dope as hell man. Only thing is that some of they type in the main content paragraph looks super small. Other than that, pretty cool. What meduim is this being printed on?
Only one thing. The number "4" on the uniforme is inverted. As you can see here: Mr. Fantastic
Your text is too big and too long... Can't you reduce it? Maybe you can brake it into 2 colums. Will be more confortable to read. And the font is too small.
One last thing, I really don't think Sanyo would like thier product almost completly obscured by such a sharp angle. I can't tell anything about the TV, except that it looks like a TV from the 80's.......flatscreen anyone?
Submitted by Pink Petrol on Mon, 2006-02-06 02:40.
The type layout is really bad, and the TV looks quite dated (early 90's maybe) - i'm guessing its not an actual Sanyo TV but correct me if i'm wrong. Don't understand the relevance of the tile pattern in the bottom-right corner and yes the hand reaching out at you is indeed a cliché. Sorry
Only thing I can suggets to make it better in my view is to explor ethe 'senses' angle further.
Submitted by Pink Petrol on Mon, 2006-02-06 02:49.
Maybe try leaving out all literal references to entertainment electronics etc and just illustrating the reactions of senses, eg, close up photograph of goose pimples or a dilated pupil etc, this could make for a more impactul imagery.
The hand isn't grabbing anything, how can it grab your senses? The headline needs to fit the image better.
Why do you have so much blue? I'd recommend changing the pale blue background to something that contrasts better and supports the tv/plastic man image.
I also agree you better get approval from the copyright holder before you use the Fantastic 4 image. Especially on a world wide forum such as this.
Dope
Dope as hell man. Only thing is that some of they type in the main content paragraph looks super small. Other than that, pretty cool. What meduim is this being printed on?
Hi
It's news paper, Magzines.
The number...
Only one thing. The number "4" on the uniforme is inverted. As you can see here: Mr. Fantastic
Your text is too big and too long... Can't you reduce it? Maybe you can brake it into 2 colums. Will be more confortable to read. And the font is too small.
Licensing
Do you have permission from Marvel Comics to use Mr. Fantastic in an ad for another company? Is this a real print peice or something for school?
Licensing
Working with lots of licensed artwork, I can tell you there is NO WAY Marvel (or whom ever) would EVER consider running this with the "4" wrong.
Also, there are going to be major issues with this in Newsprint...colors,type,trapping,bleeding....and on and on.
However,It is a nice piece!!!! Really Nice.
Oh, and no © for the comic creator? This is obviously for school, personal, there are so many legal mistakes.
One last thing, I really don't think Sanyo would like thier product almost completly obscured by such a sharp angle. I can't tell anything about the TV, except that it looks like a TV from the 80's.......flatscreen anyone?
Sorry, I don't like it. The
Sorry, I don't like it. The hand reaching out of a screen is a cliche. If I were you, I would start over.
I don't like it either.
The type layout is really bad, and the TV looks quite dated (early 90's maybe) - i'm guessing its not an actual Sanyo TV but correct me if i'm wrong. Don't understand the relevance of the tile pattern in the bottom-right corner and yes the hand reaching out at you is indeed a cliché. Sorry
Only thing I can suggets to make it better in my view is to explor ethe 'senses' angle further.
Maybe...
Maybe try leaving out all literal references to entertainment electronics etc and just illustrating the reactions of senses, eg, close up photograph of goose pimples or a dilated pupil etc, this could make for a more impactul imagery.
Pink
Love your ideas. Lots of possibilities.
The hand isn't grabbing
The hand isn't grabbing anything, how can it grab your senses? The headline needs to fit the image better.
Why do you have so much blue? I'd recommend changing the pale blue background to something that contrasts better and supports the tv/plastic man image.
I also agree you better get approval from the copyright holder before you use the Fantastic 4 image. Especially on a world wide forum such as this.
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