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the GOD's identity

sakalzone (27 pencils) | Thu, 2007-05-10 10:23

a metaphor for the fragmentation of a community .

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Johnny | Thu, 2007-05-10 13:22

A little spell checkery could help with "Identitiy," unless its an intentional variance.

At first glance, I read Hhow Aiwa Ssny.

Striking visual.

I don't know what the identity is or who the GOD is. Little more info?

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Ivan | Thu, 2007-05-10 13:25

Or you're going to hell for this. :)

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plugz | Thu, 2007-05-10 15:25

It's all a bit disjointed for me.
If the type read both across and down then it'd work being spaced that close but it's not a success for me.

It reminded me of this quote:

“Perhaps believing in good design is like believing in God, it makes you an optimist.” - Sir Terence Conran

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Apfhex | Thu, 2007-05-10 21:20

That's how I read it at least. Like plugz suggested, the vertical type just does not work. It all reads like gibberish.

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sidesey | Fri, 2007-05-11 03:31

Plus the type treatment takes away from the graphic IMO.

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pokie | Fri, 2007-05-11 23:15

Work on it

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burro | Sat, 2007-05-12 05:28

the vert type.

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sakalzone | Sat, 2007-05-12 08:41

Yes i know it is hard to read the typo but when you imagine the god' s works or his creativity, it shouldn't work as simple as we do. It must be tough. I m not telling you i know the god's thought when he created the human being or decided to destroy everything but just tried to draw a picture pretending that how can be expose god thoughts to view.

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plugz | Sun, 2007-05-13 15:29

Where is it to be published?
What is the target audience?

I feel it's missing a hell of a lot of points.
For starters, the image on the right and the shapes there don't connect to the message in any shape or form.

The typography could work very, very well if for example it was readable both horizontally and vertically, but trying to justify poor readability because "God doesn't work simply" is misguided to say the least.

Don't forget to take in to consideration that not everyone believes in God. Even if by some chance that those who do have faith would get what you're trying to say (which I doubt), what if the message is totally missed by non-believers? If you have the view that God doesn't exist and humans evolved and were not created then this has absolutely zero relevance.

To be frank, if God was a designer I think this is far from what he would have created. It's neither well designed, well researched, well thought out, or well executed. It's disjointed, hard to read, Impossible to understand the message you're trying to communicate and I think you're incredibly misguided to try to "expose God's thoughts to view" with such a rudimentary and amateur attempt at design.

Scrap it, go back to a blank page and start from scratch.
Choose new imagery, new typography and a new concept.
This does not work at all.

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sidesey | Sat, 2007-05-12 10:34

You asked for opinions I guess, so thats what your getting, otherwise why post your work in a critique section of Creativebits web site?

It's obviously up to you if you take things on board though.

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